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Page 1, lines 2-3 of abstract: it's generally a bad idea to have parenthetical remarks in an abstract, I suggest rephrasing using commas. [F: OK, I removed the parenthetical remarks. Feel free to rephrase.] [D: Looks good.]
Page 1, line 1 of abstract: LPP is not a Markov process [F: Changed into “random processes”.]
Page 1, line -3 of abstract: “C S_{n-1}-valued” is incorrect, I'll fix this when I get editing control of the file. [F: “C S_{n-1}-valued” removed.]
Page 1 line -3: delete “i.e.” [F: OK..]
Page 1, line 5 of abstract: are we using the term “block finishing times” anywhere else? Probably should rename to “last swap times”. [F: Sure.]
Page 1, line -1 of abstract: “cannot be directly deduced from Edelman-Greene” seems like a strong statement that I'm not sure we can stand behind. In any case the abstract doesn't seem to be a useful place to explain subtleties like this since no reader would understand at this point what point we're trying to make. I suggest removing this and discussing it later at an appropriate place. [F: removed.]
- Page 2, first lines of section 1.2: for a FPSAC paper I feel it is really necessary to say, “where $\stackrel{D}{=}$ denotes equality in distribution” instead of just using the notation and having its meaning be conveyed implicitly . (For a paper aimed at a probability journal this would be unnecessary.) [F: OK]
Page 3, “The last passage percolation model”: the phrase “the waiting times” in parentheses is unclear, I suggest removing it. [F: OK]
Page 3, same paragraph: after “of minimal length” I suggest adding “$|c-a|+|d-b|$” to clarify what that means. [F: Added.]
Page 3, numbering of Theorem 1 and Conjecture 1 at the bottom: we currently use different numbering for theorems and conjectures, but the numbering for examples and lemmas uses the theorem counter. This is inconsistent, we should either use one counter for all environments, or separate counters for different environments.
Page 2 line 3: delete “new” (repetitve). [F: removed]
Page 2 line 7: “such as” suggests there are additional correspondences our analaysis relies on, which is incorrect. Also it's grammatically incorrect to use “RSK”, “Burge” and “Edelman-Greene” as stand-alone nouns. Suggest restoring to something along the lines of the previous version: “well-known notions of algebraic combinatoric, namely the RSK, Burge and Edelman-Greene correspondences” (or a compressed version of this that's more correct than the current version). [F: corrected]
Page 2, line 3 of section 1.2: LPP is not a Markov process. [F: OK]
Page 2, line -5: the word “therefore” is illogical. The claim that the total absorbing time is the maximum of all the last swap times is immediate without having to know the statement in the preceding sentence. [F: corrected]
Page 4, last sentence in section 1.2: maybe find a way to mention that this fluctuation result solves the open problem from [3], modulo conjecture 1? [F: slightly rephrased sentence. Check that this is OK.] [D: rephrased slightly, I think it's good now.]
Page 5, definition of $L_{i,j}^*$. In the current version the definitions of $L^*(a,b;c,d)$ and $L^*(a,b;c,d)$ seem to be both wrapped up in equation (1.1), should we then remove the $*$ superscript from $L^*(i,1;1,j)$? [F: Right. * removed.]
Page 5, definitions in the bottom half of the page: the notation $\mathbb{Z}_{\ge 0}$ seems clunky (it's a pet peeve of mine that it's commonly used by probabilists), maybe we can replace it by $\mathbb{N}_0$ everywhere? If you like the idea, then in line 9 from the bottom we can write: “We denote by $\mathbb{N}_0^\lambda$ the set of tableaux with entries from $\mathbb{N}_0=\mathbb{N}\cup\{0\}$”, and then use $\mathbb{N}_0$ without additional explanation thereafter. [F: I agree. Changed.]
Page 6, 2-line math display after “It then follows from (2.4) that”: maybe add “$=(1-p)^{|\lambda|} p^{\sum_{(i,j)\in\lambda} \omega_{i,j}t_{i,j}}$” at the end of the first row? That seems to be a missing step in the calculation and it looks like there is enough space to add it. [F: Added.]
Page 7, first sentence of section 3.1: this sentence is unclear, I suggest rephrasing to “Let $\delta_n$ denote the partition $(n-1,n-2,\ldots,1)$ of $N=n(n-1)/2$.” [F: OK]
Page 6, lines 8-9: “a crucial fact for our purposes:” is ungrammatical, rephrase (“a fact crucial for our purposes:”, “an important fact:”, “a crucial fact:” would all be correct). [F: Rephrased.]
Page 5, lines 4: it is ungrammatical to say “we call tableau of shape lambda any array …”. This pattern “we call [X] any [Y]” (which appears in several other places in later sections, for example line 5 of section 3.1) needs to be rephrased to “We refer to any [Y] as [X]”, or “We define an [X] to be any [Y]”, or “An [X] is a any [Y]” (or possibly other variations that make sense). (By contrast, “We call $x$ an interlacing tableau if …” in the next line is correct.) [F: OK]
Page 9: replace the existing Figure 2 with a new version new-fig2.pdf I added in the figures subfolder. [F: Done. ]
Page 7, definition of $f_t$, and page 9, definition of $g_s$: I suggest adding an equation number to the definition of $f_t$ and then writing in the line above the definition of $g_s$: “Finally, the generating factor $g_s$ of $s$ is defined, analogously to (insert eq. #), as the rational function”. [F: Done.]
Page 10, beginning of section 3.3: improve the inaccurate description involving the group algebra of $S_{n-1}$ [Dan: done]
Page 5, we can put Eq. (2.1) in the text if we need to save space. [D: done.]
Page 2 line 3: “relating to last passage percolation” is unclear and fails to mention the connection to random sorting networks. I'll work on rephrasing this without making the paragraph longer. [D: fixed this.]
Page 7, beginning of section 3.1: “corners' vector” and “corners' permutation” (and “last swaps' vector”, “last swaps' permutation” on the next page) are ungrammatical. What would perhaps make sense is “corner entries vector/permutation”. For the last swaps I can't think of anything more concise than “vector of last swap times”, so maybe we should just give up and not refer to these things by any official name, or have something vague and semi-descriptive like “completion vector”. [F: changed/rephrased]
Page 8, before Example 2, in the definition of degree sequence we use the notation #{…}. Maybe replace with |{…}| as above and in Sec. 3.3. [D: fixed.]
- Page 3, lines 7-9: this informal description of LPP sounds incorrect to me. I think first passage percolation might have a description along those lines but with LPP there isn't really a “walker” one can speak of in any meaningful sense. [D: rephrased this to avoid mention of a walker.][F: OK.]
- Page 2, line -1: the terms “corner growth process”, “corner growth model” refer to the infinite-time process of randomly growing a Young diagram without restrictions on the shape it can fill. If you want to describe a process of growing specifically a staircase-shape Young diagram of order $n$, we should use different terminology (e.g., “staircase corner growth process” or some such variation) or make a comment to clarify the inconsistency with the existing literature. (Also, the corner growth process is a single process with no parameter $n$ which I think makes it more pleasant to use as the basis for our definitions, and is a well-known process, whereas what we are describing in the current version is a family of processes indexed by $n$ that hasn't been defined by anyone. So personally I would stick with the definition from the older version, but I'm fine with any choice as long as the terminology is clear.) [D: I rewrote this slightly to avoid inconsistent terminology, think it's good now.][F: OK.]
Page 11: “a realizations” → “a realization” [F: done.]
Page 9, line -3: “a symbolic algebra software” → “symbolic algebra software”. [F: done.]
Page 11: “clorrespond” → “correspond” [F: done.]
Page 5, line -11: “the so-called Greene's theorem” is clunky, and “so-called” is unnecessary for a FPSAC audience. I suggest changing this to “we first recall Greene's theorem”. [F: done.]
Page 3, after Eq. (1.1): replaced “described in detail in [15, Ch. 4]” → “see [15, Ch. 4]”.
Page 7, Example 1 (and Example 2 later): I removed the \mathbf and changed a couple of colours. Feel free go reverse / modify. [D: looks good]
Page 2, last sentence of 1.1: replaced “additional…additional” → “additional…the”.
The abstract needs to be improved. [D: I rewrote it.]
Page 5, lines 8-9 from the bottom: I see I forgot to make the change in the definition of $\Pi_{m,n}^{(k)}$ (to a disjoint union of paths instead of a $k$-tuple) and only applied it to $\Pi_{m,n}^{*(k)}$. [D: fixed.]
Page 7, before Eq. (3.2): replaced “when performing a simple random walk … the probability of observing the sequence” → “in a simple random walk … the probability of the sequence”.